Bleh!
I'm not going to e-bash you for this because you sound genuine and it seems you really tried.
But mate, this is just not good enough for NG standards, although you do see a lot of crap on here.
You need to lip-sunch it better.
And the graphics wouldn't hurt to make them a little more attractive.
But the one thing that really pissed me off was the quality of the sound. I don't know whether you have a shitty microphone or you just didn't compress/record it properly, either way, the sounds hurt my ears.
I know you can do better. Keep it up!
Cheers!